The Power of Bitterness - Writing the logline
Tuesday, October 25, 2011

As promised:

My new feature script will have the title
"The Power of Bitterness".

And the logline is:
"A long lost princess, with mysterious abilities and a dark mind, desires the throne that was once her destiny, when the King's cousin takes over the crown with force; leaving her to choose if she should fight for her own ambition, or the fate of others."

This is how the process went:

I began with writing who's the main character, main character's goal and the hook. I got this:

Who: A three hundred year old assassin with mysterious powers
Goal: Desires the thrown that was once her destiny
Hook: The King's power greedy cousin takes over the crown with force and kills anyone that opposes him.

I put it together and got:

"A three hundred year old assassin, with mysterious powers, desires the throne that was once her destiny, when the King's cousin takes over the crown with force, and extinguish anyone that opposes him."

It didn't work out. If the person have had three hundred years to do something, why hasn't she before? And a three hundred year old woman doesn't make you think of a barbie doll, but rather a classic witch.

So:

Who: A long lost princess with mysterious powers.

"A long lost princess, with mysterious abilities and a dark mind, desires the throne that was once her destiny, when the King's cousin takes over the crown with force, and extinguish anyone that opposes him."

Hm, sure, but why care? She is obviously not a nice person and if she or the cousin has the power does not matter much to us.

I removed the fact about the new king, which is actually not very interesting and added a little vital addition to the end and I got the final result:

"A long lost princess, with mysterious abilities and a dark mind, desires the throne that was once her destiny, when the King's cousin takes over the crown with force; leaving her to choose if she should fight for her own ambition, or the fate of others."

What do you think?