I’m working my way through my first draft of Sunlight. A draft never finished. I think it was because the main character’s arc was done before the story was finished. And, as usual, I got stuck in the third act.
As I read it trough the first time I found the script thrilling. It was much better than I remember it.
I had made notes about some extra scenes in the beginning, showing what kind of environment the place is, but I decided not to. The script should start when the story begins, not before. It will soon be obvious that it is a world of men (men filled with testosterone since women are lacking) and the world has become a desert because of human wars about the final recourses left.
In the second act focus is moving from the main character to his brother. The brother needs attention, but I think I need to reconsider my strategy. We should perhaps follow the brother through the main character instead.
I sometimes read at forums questions about naming characters, if it is really necessary, especially if the character’s name is never mentioned. I can tell you one thing: a character who play’s an important part, and walks and talks, needs a name. It is very strange to have a character called “father” (and not a religious father, but a biological). In action texts it becomes “the father” or “XX’s father”. It gets much better reading if there is a name instead.
I think I should put some more focus on the fact that one of the societies learned by the human mistakes, and the other didn’t – and they will repeat the same thing over again.
And the one group who learned they are way too angel-like with no flaws. That is no good either.