This was my contribution to Julie Gray's Short Scene Contest. It made it to the top three as a finalist! The scene had to contain the three words "parakeet", "waltz" and "Sumatra".
INT. BIRDHOUSE - DAY
JOHN appears to be watching two parakeets on the other side of a glass wall.
The male bird desperately tries to court the seemingly uninterested female. He approaches, she moves away, over and over like an endless waltz.
John’s eyes keep to wander to JENNIE, a big-busted young woman watching the birds just a step from him.
He takes that step.
He stands close to her.
They are parakeets.
Jennie takes a step sideways away from John.
Yes, I know.
John takes another step to catch up.
They are from Sumatra.
Jennie gives him a look.
Oh, I thought they fetched them on
When John follows, Jennie crosses her arms and gives him a stern look.
Get lost, okay?
Jennie strides away.
One the other side of the glass the courting finally has paid off. The male sits on the female’s back, mating.
He turns and runs after Jennie, catching up.
Do you know where penguins come
The comments I got was positive, but I was asking myself why no one saw a potential rapist in John. I meant it to be a funny scene, but yet - why was John always a good guy.
Because I wrote the story from his point of view. I even gave him a name. He can't be dangerous then, can he?